Okay, guys. I'm done. Over 2000 people had signed up for my Yahoo!Group over the past nine years. I removed over 900 of them for bouncing emails before moving the list over to MailChimp in switching newsletters. That left just over 1300 people.
First newsletter I had problems with people who forgot they'd signed up for the newsletter and who marked it as spam. A red-flag went up at Mail Chimp and they thought I was using their service to send out junk emails. I explained the problem, they understood. I added the caveat at the start of my newsletters about unsubscribing rather than dumping me into the trash bin.
My complaint rate for Newsletter #3 was zero as a result and I was thrilled. People listened!
Yeah, not so much. I still have a huge number of people who never open the email at all. This month .7% of them called the newsletter spam without ever opening it. Yes, that is point 7 percent. Mail Chimp is adamant about not sending spam...and so am I. As a result, my account is once more shut down until they look into it. I've pled my case, I hope they listen.
If I get my account back, let me warn you all now. I've sent a total of four newsletters over the past five months (less than one a month) since I made the switch. If you have not opened 3 out of the 4, I am removing your name from the list and you will receive no further updates on works in progress or new releases. I have no choice but to take drastic action or I will be shut down permanently.
To those of you who DO open the newsletters, thank you. I promise something special in the next newsletter for those who remain on the list as a special way of saying thanks.
Diana
Thursday, June 14, 2012
Wednesday, June 13, 2012
Final cover
This is close to the final cover for Shooting Star, my murder-mystery erotic romance. Still finessing it. Going to make my name bigger so it shows up in the thumbnails.... :)
My plan is to release the ebook and print formats on the same day. Tonight I finished the layout for print, but am bleary-eyed and don't trust it. Will give everything a once-over tomorrow and then publish if all is good. After the cover is adjusted, that is. :)
Crossing my fingers that I can have everything uploaded by this time tomorrow. Then it's just a matter of waiting for the sites to make it live and we're off!
Play safe,
Diana
My plan is to release the ebook and print formats on the same day. Tonight I finished the layout for print, but am bleary-eyed and don't trust it. Will give everything a once-over tomorrow and then publish if all is good. After the cover is adjusted, that is. :)
Crossing my fingers that I can have everything uploaded by this time tomorrow. Then it's just a matter of waiting for the sites to make it live and we're off!
Play safe,
Diana
Tuesday, June 12, 2012
The Evaluator
Criteria. It’s amazing how often we live and die by our
criteria. Why do you like action movies but not horror? What do you look for in
buying a new car? How do you define friendship? What makes a meaningful life?
Whether consciously or not, we set our criteria and often do not deviate from
our set list.
As writers, we’re used to being judged. Getting reviews,
both good, bad and indifferent, is a part of our lives. Critics evaluate our
books and write reviews according to their tastes. Sometimes they tell us their
criteria outright, but more often the judgments are pronounced without ever
defining the standards against which we are being measured. For every person
who likes our work, there are a dozen who don’t and four of them will be vocal about
it. It’s okay, it’s part of the job.
But what about in our writing? How do we use sets of criteria when writing our books? In more ways than you
realize.
The first and most obvious choices come in determining
genre. Would this story work better as science fiction or fantasy? A
traditional romance or an erotic romance? A thriller or a murder-mystery? Each
genre has its own set of rules (criteria) and when we choose the format of the
book, we’ve made our first decision as the Evaluator.
Then there’s the actual creation of character. Will the
protagonist be male or female? Will there be one of each? Two of each? Tolkien
sticks with male for the gender question but goes for numbers (nine in the
Fellowship alone). What about hair color? Race? Age? What is his/her
background? Will it matter to the story? What’s truly important for the reader
to know?
Authors see these decisions as creativity. In the
non-fiction world, they are criteria. Based on your creative decisions, others
read the work and project their own expectations onto what you’ve written. If our
stories agree with their expectations, the reader forms a favorable opinion of
the story. If they don’t...well, that’s where bad reviews come from.
We act as the Evaluator for every situation we put characters
in. We make them assess, judge, and act according to the criteria we (the
authors) have predetermined for them. They choose a blue shirt over a white one
because we decided they like the color blue. They jump in front of busses to
save puppies, leap tall buildings in a single bound and get the girl in the end
because we’ve set up criteria determining what a hero is and how he should
behave.
Take Tulsidas, for example. He lived in the late 1500’s,
early 1600’s. When he first read Valmiki’s Ramayana*, he judged it according to
the standards of his day for how a hero should act. When Ram, for example,
shoots an opponent in the back in Valmiki’s telling, Tulsidas reacted by
rewriting the scene and creating his own version where Ram confronts the opponent
face-to-face. The end result is the same in both works: Ram kills his opponent.
Two ways to get there depending on your criteria for heroes.
Which also proves my final point: Criteria change over time.
As we grow and change, so do our tastes in what we like or
dislike. I said at the top of the post that, consciously or not, we all have
criteria by which we judge our lives, from the tiniest interactions to the Big
Decisions. Why should we expect people to react to our stories in the same way
from year to year and from country to country? Heck, from male to female for
that matter. Or subdivide into age groups. What is hot this year, is forgotten
the next. The lesson? Don’t try to second-guess the fickle public. Write tight.
Write well. Write what you love.
And doing that, of course, means making your characters
grapple with those same decisions we all face. Why does your hero prefer
brunettes over redheads? Why does your heroine drive a Spitfire instead of a
mini-van? How is it these two separate people are actually friends (Felix and
Oscar, anyone?). What are the criteria your characters
set to make their lives meaningful?
Activity
First, make a list of all the criteria you use when judging
a book. Be specific. Don’t just say, “it’s exciting.” That’s too vague. Say, “I
like it when the hero’s life is in danger.” Try to come up with at least 10.
Then choose a work you’ve nearly finished writing. Length
doesn’t matter. Make two lists using that wip:
List 1. What criteria did you choose (subconsciously or
consciously) before you started writing the story regarding genre, character
and plot?
List 2. What are the criteria your characters use to
determine if their lives have meaning?
Look over your lists. How do you feel about your choices?
How many were you aware of as you made them? And most importantly, how do these
lists compare to how you judge books you read?
(This is part of the
“What Role do You Play?” series. Previous roles can be found here.)
My initial goal was to publish all these in a workbook format but other stories are crowding for time. These will remain workshops on my blog until future notice! If you're finding these workshops useful, please consider donating to the cause. This is how I make money writing. :)
Slight delay
Today's workshop will be posted in the afternoon rather than the morning. Seems the author left her thumb drive at work. You know, the thumb drive with the workshop on it? Yeah.
So nothing to see here until later. In the meantime, check out the pretty paintings.
(sigh)
Diana
PS this was supposed to go out at 6:00 AM -- and just realized it was set for 6:00 PM. Grrr. Am working on the REAL post and will have it up shortly...
Sunday, June 10, 2012
Data points
Before the end of the month I’ll be releasing my newest
full-length novel, Shooting Star.
This book is a bit of a side-step for me. It’s my first foray into the
murder-mystery genre. Don’t worry, the erotic romance is still there, but this
time with a deadly twist.
In preparation to its release, I did some data-searching
using the Kindle store. What is the going price for a nearly-300-page
murder-mystery erotic romance with BDSM sex? Not surprisingly, Amazon doesn’t
have a bestseller list for that genre.
Instead, I looked at the bestsellers in the Kindle store in
three categories: Murder-mystery/thrillers, Erotica and Romance (I thought I
remembered a list that was erotic romance but maybe that’s just old age
inventing memories for me again!). I made a database, recording the approximate
number of pages that Amazon provides, the price of the book and the publisher.
My goal was to find the average price for each of these
genre and then use that to guide me. What I discovered, however, gave me quite
a surprise.
Murder-mystery/thrillers
These books are the longest of the three genre I compared,
clocking in at an average of 418 pages per book. Three of those listed were
short (under 75 pages)*. Only one of those three was self-published. In fact,
of the 20 bestsellers, only six were self-published and the remaining fourteen
came from indie or Big Six companies.
*the prices of these three shorts ($1.99, $1.99 and $.99)
were not included in the average prices listed below.
The highest price of a traditionally published book was
$14.99; the average was $9.71.
The highest price of a self-published book was $3.99; the
average was $2.19.
Erotica
Surprisingly, there was almost an even split between the
number of full-length books here and the under-75 page stories. Eight books
were under, eleven were full-length and one had no number. The average size of
the full-length books was 283 pages; of the short stories, the average length
was 42 pages.
Another surprise (okay, not really): only four out of the
twenty Top Selling books in the Kindle store on this list were from traditional
or indie publishers. Sixteen of the books were self-published.
Highest price of a traditionally published book was $12.99
(there were two at this price).
Highest price of a self-published book was $3.99; the
average was $2.54.
Romance
Here is where I expected the traditional publishers to
reign. Boy, did I get a shock!
Of the top 20, only seven belonged to a traditional
publisher. Floored me! And the top three are all E L James’ series. Two others
on the list were “ghost” listings for the same books. So 5 of the twenty slots
were taken up with the same 3 books. Nora Roberts accounted for two of the
remaining four traditionally-published books.
No short works appeared on this list. The top sellers are
all full-length books. The average length is 373 pages.
Highest price of a traditionally published book was $14.99;
the average was $11.13.
Highest price of a self-published book was $4.99; average
was $2.99.
To sum up:
- 70% of the murder-mystery/thrillers on the Top 20 bestsellers list are traditionally published; these are also the least-expensive in both traditional and self-published choices and have the longest book length. If you’re looking for the biggest bang for your buck, m-m/thrillers are the way to go.
- 80% of the erotica on the Top 20 bestsellers list are self-published; they, however, are the most expensive in both traditional and self-published choices with the shortest book length of the three genre. Watch out, you’re going to pay for that sex!
- 68% of the romances on the Top 20 bestsellers list are self-published; for both traditional and self-publishing, they fall in the middle of the pack as far a pricing, but edge a little closer to the murder-mystery/thrillers as far as number of pages.
Remember, I only looked at the Kindle Bestsellers lists.
These numbers do not reflect paperback or hardcover books. That will be another
study for another day.
Caveat the second: The bestseller lists change hourly so
this is snapshot data. One hour in time. That said, I’ve checked the lists
several times over the past 24 hrs and the books are still the same as when I
collected the data.
Caveat the third: I have no idea if some of the lower prices
reflect a current sale on the part of the author or publisher. At least a
half-dozen books spread over the three lists were the first in a series and often the
first is priced as a gateway drug with a lower price to get people interested.
A deeper study would need to be done to see if that has any impact. A deeper study
should also gather data over a longer period of time.
So what does it all
mean?
A really good question. My conclusions?
Ebooks are cheaper if self-published than if published by
one of the traditional presses yet books at prices of $12.99 are still making
it onto these lists (and not all at the upper end were well-known authors).
No book on the lists under 75 pages, regardless of genre,
cost more than $.99 (Which is exactly what I thought they should be, but the
data-junkie in me likes facts to back up my seemingly irrational decisions).
And finally:
I can use Dean
Wesley Smith’s philosophy and price my book at $4.99 and not be out of
line. It would be slightly higher than the average self-pubbed, but still well
within the range of prices that are on the bestsellers lists.
Hope you find the data useful. I had fun compiling it. :)
Play safe,
Diana
Tuesday, June 05, 2012
The Interpreter
When we were in school, we wrote analytical papers that looked
at all sides of a problem. Unfortunately, most teachers and college professors
considered works of literature problems to be analyzed. For years this gave me
a lopsided view of both literature and analytical papers.
That’s why I like the concept of the Interpreter better. It’s
okay to show your bias, as long as you’re honest about it. You’re finding meaning
in data, examining events and tracing them back to their causes, you’re making
decisions about what is significant and what isn’t.
How do we translate this very left-brain activity into the
right-brain world of fiction?
The answer again is two-fold.
The first comes in the process of creating the story. What
information do you choose to include? What do you omit? Like the Observer,
you’re coloring our view of what you show us, but now you’re being even more
specific, pushing us in one direction or another as your characters interpret
other’s actions and react accordingly.
One character asks another how the day is going. The
response is a single word: “Fine.” But what was the tone of voice in that
reply? You, dear author, play the Interpreter with the very next sentence. Does
the speaker throw a glance of malevolence at the questioner? Give a pretty
smile and a bat of the eyelashes? Shrug with nonchalance?
Of course, the pitfall here is the adverb. Be wary! “‘Fine,’ he said malevolently” is weak. “ ‘Fine.’ Jake’s malevolent glare made Scott
step back in alarm.” goes a lot further, actually interpreting the spoken
word for the reader by using the characters’ reactions.
“Scrutinize” and “probing” are two words that come up in my
lazy-man’s thesaurus (the one attached to my word processing program) for
“analyze.” Those words lead to the second way an author can be the Interpreter:
You can write that academic, analytical essay about your own book.
Let’s face it, how many essays have you written on the Odyssey, The Scarlet Letter or Moby Dick? Try stepping aside from your
own manuscript and looking at it from the point of view of a student who has to
write that essay. When examining character motivation, plot arcs,
foreshadowing, similes and metaphors – what would he/she say?
Of course, this begs a hard question to face: did you write
anything worth analyzing?
Homework J
Take any story you’ve written (but not yet published) and
write a literary analysis of it. Pay particular attention to plot structure,
theme, point of view, setting and characterization. I’m not kidding. Go through
the process and actually write the essay.
Once you’re done, play the Reporter. Setting emotion aside,
what did you learn about your own writing in doing that exercise?
As always,
Play safe!
Diana
(edited to fix word missing in first sentence. sigh.)
Friday, June 01, 2012
New Look
Summer's almost here and I didn't want to edit, so I played around with the look of the blog. If you'd like to see it and are reading this in a reader, you'll have to click through. Let me know what you think!
As the web changes and what we expect it to do for us expands, static webpages seem to be dying out. When I first started as a published author (in 2003), having a webpage was a necessity and their purpose simply announced information. Like museums, viewers looked, but they did not touch.
Now, however, it isn't enough to have a simple web page, an author must have a web presence.
Presence. As in attending. As in "present and accounted for" as well as "actively participating." As in not absent.
A webpage that only talks at people doesn't fit that description. People who venture out onto the web now expect to be more social. Authors are expected to provide interactive experiences or, at the very least, allow a more immediate way for others to speak their minds. Social media has exploded and the author who isn't "here" is missing a great opportunity to communicate (We'll set aside the question of whether or not that communication is needed or not. That's a blog post for a different time).
My website is an old-fashioned, static webpage that hasn't been updated in months. Mostly because my webmistress is busy and my one attempt to find someone new to take it over fell apart. And I don't know HTML and am not going to learn it. One makes priorities in life, doing what one can and paying others for what one cannot. I'd pay someone for their knowledge, if I could find someone willing to take on the job.
But that begs the question: what good is a website that isn't updated in a timely fashion and that readers can't really communicate with anyway? A very good question and one that's gotten me pretty much convinced to abandon the old site and re-direct the URL to this blog instead. Blogger's tools have gotten more sophisticated than when I first started with them all those years ago. All the information I have there, I can have here. Cheaper. And faster.
All this is in warning: before the end of summer, I plan to implement a re-direct of that site so the same address now points here. Visit "The Official Diana Hunter Site" and let me know what pieces are there that you want to see me re-create here. Do you like the author's links? What about the puzzles to download? Would you miss the reviews of each book?
Comment or send me an email, my quiet readers. Help me make this site a more effective, more interactive place!
Play safe,
Diana
As the web changes and what we expect it to do for us expands, static webpages seem to be dying out. When I first started as a published author (in 2003), having a webpage was a necessity and their purpose simply announced information. Like museums, viewers looked, but they did not touch.
Now, however, it isn't enough to have a simple web page, an author must have a web presence.
Presence. As in attending. As in "present and accounted for" as well as "actively participating." As in not absent.
A webpage that only talks at people doesn't fit that description. People who venture out onto the web now expect to be more social. Authors are expected to provide interactive experiences or, at the very least, allow a more immediate way for others to speak their minds. Social media has exploded and the author who isn't "here" is missing a great opportunity to communicate (We'll set aside the question of whether or not that communication is needed or not. That's a blog post for a different time).
My website is an old-fashioned, static webpage that hasn't been updated in months. Mostly because my webmistress is busy and my one attempt to find someone new to take it over fell apart. And I don't know HTML and am not going to learn it. One makes priorities in life, doing what one can and paying others for what one cannot. I'd pay someone for their knowledge, if I could find someone willing to take on the job.
But that begs the question: what good is a website that isn't updated in a timely fashion and that readers can't really communicate with anyway? A very good question and one that's gotten me pretty much convinced to abandon the old site and re-direct the URL to this blog instead. Blogger's tools have gotten more sophisticated than when I first started with them all those years ago. All the information I have there, I can have here. Cheaper. And faster.
All this is in warning: before the end of summer, I plan to implement a re-direct of that site so the same address now points here. Visit "The Official Diana Hunter Site" and let me know what pieces are there that you want to see me re-create here. Do you like the author's links? What about the puzzles to download? Would you miss the reviews of each book?
Comment or send me an email, my quiet readers. Help me make this site a more effective, more interactive place!
Play safe,
Diana
Wednesday, May 30, 2012
Free enterprise
reposted with permission from cfduprey.blogspot.com
In my websurfing tonight, I did a quick search for my name. The entire first page of Google's results were for 1) this blog or 2) the book available for sale on several sites. So far, so good.
But then, on the second page of returned results, I saw a copy of Hardship and Hardtack on eBay. This surprised me as I've sold only a handful of the paperback editions and I know almost everyone who bought one (several of them I met this weekend!). Who would be selling their copy already???
Turns out to be an online retailer in Australia. I'm thinking, "How on earth did one of my books get to Australia?" Then I read this little gem in the small print, "Once you have placed your order we will immediately order it from our supplier. We generally receive items from this supplier within 7 to 14 days. Please ADD the extra time it will take to get from Booktopia's Sydney warehouse to you via Australia Post."
In other words, they'd order it from Createspace, get the book in and then resell it to the purchaser for a highly inflated price (currently $27.40)!
Now, I have no trouble with free enterprise. The very fact that I sell my writing should give you a clue that I have capitalistic leanings (Only leanings. If I were a full-fledged capitalist, I'd be in banking or on Wall Street). And I get my cut from the sale at Createspace, so if he/she wants a cut too, who am I to complain?
No, the part that surprises me most of all? That anyone would bother buying from them when, with a simple Internet search, they can buy direct from Createspace and save the middleman and his markup! Heck, I've put three links in this blog post alone to point readers in the right direction!
If you'd like a print copy of Hardship and Hardtack, let me encourage you to save your pennies and purchase direct here. Or save even more and buy an ebook copy from any one of those sites that comes up in search (although my preference is from Smashwords. The owner treats authors well and you can get all formats on the site).
No matter where you purchase your copy, of course, the important part is that you purchase it. If you don't have your copy yet, why not? In this 150th anniversary year commemorating the start of the American Civil War, this is an easy way to learn a little history and live the life of a Union soldier!
Note from Diana:
You know you're going to go out and Google your own name now. Heck, I'm off to do the same!
Btw, don't forget there's a tab at the top of the blog page to read more about this book. If you're reading this post in a viewer, you'll have to click through to get to the tab.
Play safe,
D
Tuesday, May 29, 2012
The Reporter
Continuing our series at looking how non-fiction writing
situations can help fiction writers.
“Just the facts,
ma’am.”
Joe
Friday (Dragnet)
(and if you remember
that reference, you’re as old as I am!)
Being a reporter means finding the facts and getting them
straight. While a reporter might provide an overview of differing opinions
(such as in a political race or detailing the sides on a voter’s referendum),
they do not give their own thoughts and feelings about either side.
Reporters do not try to influence, they simply inform.
Readers expect to make their own decisions, not be led by the reporter. Take
note: this is different from the Observer.
The most obvious way a fiction author can use reporters’
skills is in getting the facts straight. Nothing takes me out of a story
quicker than an author making a mistake in historical accuracy or geography (see
previous post on 1812). Doing research is part of a reporter’s job – its part
of an author’s job as well.
When it comes to subject matter, my biggest weakness is in
anything to do with the medical field. I have my first aid certification (now
expired) but that’s as far as I go. Yet, my characters are always getting
banged up and needing medical care. In my first draft I write what I want the doctors and nurses to do, but
then I send the scenes to a person with real experience and she tells me what I
can keep and what I need to change. The last thing I need is for a doctor or
nurse to read my book and get pulled out of the story saying, “You had me right
up until this point and now it’s just stupid.” Knowing the facts is vital to a fiction author.
But there are other ways the Reporter can come to the fore
in writing a story; Reporters also ask and answer questions. They anticipate
what their readers want to know and provide the answer, often before the reader
has even fully formed the question. Asking questions allows them to fully
inform their public.
Fiction writers do this in two different ways.
First comes the big question: “what if.” All stories start
with that. But authors don’t stop there. We ask questions about what our
characters look like, how they move, what they wear. Even if this isn’t a
conscious questioning, it occurs every time we start a new story. Who will be
the protagonist? What is his/her conflict? Does my story have an overarching
theme? For many, the process of questioning is a mental game of Q &A, for
others (plotters), it often is the precursor to actually writing the story.
But we also raise questions in the reader. Good stories keep
us on the edge of our seat and make us read far longer into the night than we
intended. Who is the murderer? Sherlock Holmes will tell us! Can Frodo resist
the pull of the One Ring? Will Katniss win the Hunger Games? What will happen
to Peeta if she does? What will happen next?
This is where we differ from the Reporter. We don’t
anticipate reader’s questions, we create them. And that’s just plain old fun. J
Activity
Channel your inner Reporter and take a look at your latest
work in progress.
·
Are all your facts in order? What do you need to
know in order to reflect reality? What research do you still need to do?
·
What question(s) end each chapter? What is it
the reader is so desperate to know that they’ll keep reading and not put the
book down?
Analyzing your writing through the lens of the Reporter can
add layers of verisimilitude and excitement. Go for it!
Monday, May 28, 2012
Remembering
My father and my all my uncles served their country in the Armed Forces. Dad was in the Army, so was his brother. My mom's brothers all joined different branches with one in the Navy, one in the Air Force and another in the SeaBees (Navy mechanics) and all three served during WWII.
The Vietnam War ended my junior year in high school and we all gave a sigh of relief. No wars for us. But a close friend joined the Marines after college and made the Corps his career, retiring a little while ago at the rank of Brigadier General.
So you can see the military has been a part of my life for a long time. I wrote Services Rendered partly as a tribute to those who came home. Because, you see, I'm lucky. Everyone I know who went to war -- came home.
While other towns mark today as a day of commemoration, on May 30th, Waterloo, NY will continue its long tradition to honor those who did not return. The parade is more pomp and circumstance with little in the way of festivities. It's a solemn marking of every war, from the first that brought us independence to the latest with our soldiers overseas. There will be speeches and the laying of wreaths. We will pause to remember those who gave their lives so we can have our political squabbles and our blue and red arguments. What we should not forget, is that those colors exist peacefully along with stripes and stars of white. They didn't forget. Neither should we.
RIP all who have gone before.
Diana
The Vietnam War ended my junior year in high school and we all gave a sigh of relief. No wars for us. But a close friend joined the Marines after college and made the Corps his career, retiring a little while ago at the rank of Brigadier General.
So you can see the military has been a part of my life for a long time. I wrote Services Rendered partly as a tribute to those who came home. Because, you see, I'm lucky. Everyone I know who went to war -- came home.
While other towns mark today as a day of commemoration, on May 30th, Waterloo, NY will continue its long tradition to honor those who did not return. The parade is more pomp and circumstance with little in the way of festivities. It's a solemn marking of every war, from the first that brought us independence to the latest with our soldiers overseas. There will be speeches and the laying of wreaths. We will pause to remember those who gave their lives so we can have our political squabbles and our blue and red arguments. What we should not forget, is that those colors exist peacefully along with stripes and stars of white. They didn't forget. Neither should we.
RIP all who have gone before.
Diana
Friday, May 25, 2012
Memorial Day
This weekend I'll be in Waterloo, NY signing copies of Hardship and Hardtack. You can read all about it here. If you're in the area, stop by and say hello, then take a moment to visit one of several cemeteries in the area and pay your respects to those who gave all.
Diana
Addendum: Great to see so many people today! Sold several copies of my historical and saw lots of old friends and made some new ones. Best part? Tomorrow I get to do it all over again!
Diana
Addendum: Great to see so many people today! Sold several copies of my historical and saw lots of old friends and made some new ones. Best part? Tomorrow I get to do it all over again!
Tuesday, May 22, 2012
The Observer
Of all the situations, arguably the Observer is the closest of
the non-fiction roles to that of the fiction writer. I’ve already written
several writing workshops that run a close parallel (Writing journals, the Great “What if?” the Power of Observation)
Go through an existing manuscript. Find a scene that is simply described. Either as an exercise or as an edit, filter that description through the eyes of one of your characters. Let us share in that person's perceptions and observations about the place.
Play safe!
But this role goes a step further than simple description. Fiction writers should use the role of the Observer to add a reflective component
that takes their work deeper, giving it another layer of meaning. For example, I can write a simple description
of an apartment flat in the seedier neighborhoods of 1930’s Chicago or I can go
further, as Tennessee Williams does with his character Tom in The Glass Menagerie. There, Williams
successfully uses the role of the Observer to comment on the setting and the other
characters in the play, filtering our experience through the character’s eyes.
As an audience, we see the set. It’s tangible. Right there
behind the curtain. The lights come up and we see the drabness, the shabby,
second-hand furniture, the fire escape that serves as the exit to the apartment
(metaphorically as well as physically).
But Tom begins his soliloquy and suddenly we’re viewing that
set in a very different way. Throughout the play our perceptions of the
apartment change. It becomes a prison, a cage he has to escape like his father
before him. In his role as Observer, he reflects on what he (and we) see and
transforms it into a deeper experience.
Observer, take two:
Four people standing on a streetcorner, chatting. An
accident occurs in the intersection. They all see it; they’re all witnesses and
they all give statements to the police. Yet each of them tells a different
story. One focuses on the speed of the two cars, another swears the light was
yellow, the person next to him says it was red. The fourth only heard the
accident but when he turned around he saw a person of color running away and
that must be important.
This is a common phenomenon. The police deal with it every
day. None of them are wrong, they all have pieces of the puzzle, yet their
stories are different. Their beliefs and values affect their interpretations of what they saw.
Use this. Your characters observe stuff all the time. They
see things, they meet people. What does your hero see that your heroine did not
(or vice-versa?). What does the villain of your story feel about the event that
put another in the role of hero and not him?
This is also a great way to introduce conflict. Let two main
characters witness the same event or be in the same physical place, but let
their reflections about it be different. In The
Glass Menagerie, Tom’s reflections are colored by memory (Williams even
calls it a “memory play”) but Amanda’s (Tom’s mother) thoughts reflect the
harsh light of reality. As a result, Tom views his sister Laura in a very
different way than his mother does. The resulting conflict that uses Laura as
the foil for these observations drives the entire play.
So, two ways you can use the non-fiction role of the
Observer in your fiction writing: 1) using a character’s reflections and
perceptions to influence the reader’s views and/or 2) letting characters
observations be in opposition with one another to create conflict. Both are
excellent methods for adding deeper levels of meaning to your stories.
Activity
Go through an existing manuscript. Find a scene that is simply described. Either as an exercise or as an edit, filter that description through the eyes of one of your characters. Let us share in that person's perceptions and observations about the place.
Play safe!
Diana
As always, if you find these workshops helpful, please consider a donation. Writing is my livelihood, after all!
As always, if you find these workshops helpful, please consider a donation. Writing is my livelihood, after all!
What role are you taking?
In academic writing, much attention is paid to the writing
situation. What is the purpose of the
piece? Are you trying to persuade? To inform? Are you sounding the call to
action? What, exactly, do you want your reader to know, understand or do after
they’ve finished reading your piece?
According to Mike Palmquist in his book Joining the Conversation, Writing in Collegeand Beyond, there are six basic roles the non-fiction writer plays: the Observer, the Reporter, the Interpreter,
the Evaluator, the Problem Solver, and the Advocate.
In fiction, however, these writing situations are often
ignored. We think we have a single purpose: to entertain; that we have no other
reason for writing a good story than to write a good story.
When it comes to character, though, we shouldn’t ignore
these roles. Think about the books you’ve read. How often have you been moved
to consider a deeper philosophical question brought up in a fiction work
because a character played the role of the Advocate? Viewed a problem in a new
light when a character became the Observer? Thrown a book across the room
because the unthinking masses adopted the villain’s role as Problem Solver as
the correct path?
Over the next few weeks we’re going to take each of these
writing situations and look at them in depth from a fiction point of view. How
can you use all that academic writing you learned in college and put it to use
inside your own stories? It’s easier than you think.
Today we’ll start with the Observer, then next week take on
the part of the Reporter, and so on. Ready?
Diana
Diana
Saturday, May 19, 2012
planting
Oh, my glory. How on earth did our ancestors ever survive? We're putting in six raised garden beds (for vegetables) down at the cabin. They're not large, only 4 feet by 8 feet with three foot paths between them. The fence we're putting in around them is a little over 30' x 26' in area. Big enough, but not huge when you compare the clearing that had to be done for our nation's farmland.
So how did they do it? I'm sore, tired and cranky after two days of chopping roots (we'd cleared the poplar stand earlier, but those roots are everywhere!), and hauling soil and compost. Mostly, though it's the roots that have me appreciating the intensive labor both native Americans and European settlers had to go through in order to farm.
Hats off to them!
Play safe,
Diana
So how did they do it? I'm sore, tired and cranky after two days of chopping roots (we'd cleared the poplar stand earlier, but those roots are everywhere!), and hauling soil and compost. Mostly, though it's the roots that have me appreciating the intensive labor both native Americans and European settlers had to go through in order to farm.
Hats off to them!
Play safe,
Diana
Tuesday, May 15, 2012
Time to take stock...
Do you realize I've published twenty-four writing workshops already? Just a little over six months worth of writing prompts, choices and ideas to consider. The question now begs to be answered...
My readers are a silent bunch, that much I realized a while back. I get a steady stream of visitors every day, but rarely does anyone post, even when asked a direct question. As a result, I sometimes feel as if I'm dropping these posts down a very long well and have no idea if they hit bottom or if they resonate with anyone.
Don't get me wrong, I enjoy writing them and will continue offering workshops on what I've learned along the way. I tend to be a reflective learner, so going through the process of writing it down for others is a way for me to understand my own inner workings (for an example, see After the First Draft).
But working in a vacuum isn't easy and I really need some feedback. Email me at diana@dianahunter.net if you don't want to leave a comment: Are you finding the workshops helpful? If so, which ones are best? If not, what would you prefer?
Thanks for your comments (both positive and negative allowed!)
Diana
My readers are a silent bunch, that much I realized a while back. I get a steady stream of visitors every day, but rarely does anyone post, even when asked a direct question
Don't get me wrong, I enjoy writing them and will continue offering workshops on what I've learned along the way. I tend to be a reflective learner, so going through the process of writing it down for others is a way for me to understand my own inner workings (for an example, see After the First Draft).
But working in a vacuum isn't easy and I really need some feedback. Email me at diana@dianahunter.net if you don't want to leave a comment: Are you finding the workshops helpful? If so, which ones are best? If not, what would you prefer?
Thanks for your comments (both positive and negative allowed!)
Diana
Sunday, May 13, 2012
Vote on the cover!
Okay, got to playing last night. Which of the three covers below do you like best? Here's a blurb for the story (remember, murder-mystery erotic romance with BDSM and vanilla sex):
When a Hollywood film company comes to town, everyone gets caught up in the excitement. Callie O'Malley sees a way to add realism to her newest crime novel and her best friend, Laura Woodburn, sees her ticket out of town.
Hal London, heartthrob of stage and screen, figures this is his last Earth Captain movie. The franchise made him rich and now he can be choosy about the parts he takes and indulge in some real acting. His screen sidekick, Alex Hirsh, however, would die to get the leading role. It's no secret he's tired of playing second fiddle and wants his turn as the leading man.
But when an explosion rocks the set and people start dying, secrets come out and fingers point in all directions. Who is the real killer...and will he -- or she-- kill again?
Here are your choices:
Please note: At this point the watermarks for the various elements are still on the mock-ups. Once a final decision is made, I'll purchase the appropriate photos and those marks will be gone.
So here's your opportunity to influence a book cover. Make your choice and put it in the comments below!
Diana, waiting with baited breath...
When a Hollywood film company comes to town, everyone gets caught up in the excitement. Callie O'Malley sees a way to add realism to her newest crime novel and her best friend, Laura Woodburn, sees her ticket out of town.
Hal London, heartthrob of stage and screen, figures this is his last Earth Captain movie. The franchise made him rich and now he can be choosy about the parts he takes and indulge in some real acting. His screen sidekick, Alex Hirsh, however, would die to get the leading role. It's no secret he's tired of playing second fiddle and wants his turn as the leading man.
But when an explosion rocks the set and people start dying, secrets come out and fingers point in all directions. Who is the real killer...and will he -- or she-- kill again?
Here are your choices:
| Choice A |
| Choice B |
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| Choice C |
So here's your opportunity to influence a book cover. Make your choice and put it in the comments below!
Diana, waiting with baited breath...
Saturday, May 12, 2012
catching up
I feel like I've just emerged from a long sleep. Or maybe surfaced from a deep underwater dive is a better metaphor. Why? Because I just finished writing a new, as-yet-unnamed, novel. Whee!
I started writing this story back in July, 2011. I had lots of time in the summer, so the first 40,000 words went down pretty fast. But then my day job kicked in and my writing time was relegated to the weekends. I've also found that I don't write well from Thanksgiving till about mid-January. I can write short, slice-of-life stories then, but I just can't stay focused on a large work with all the festivities. "Callie's story" (as it is named on my computer) got set aside and the most I did was pick at it now and again.
That's the problem when people ask me, "How long does it take for you to write a novel?" If I were to actually log my time in front of the keyboard over the past ten months, I'd have to say two to three weeks of 24/7 days. Break it out into 40-hr weeks and the time grows to 8-12 weeks. But because I write on the weekends or at night, or when I'm waiting in the doctor's office, only grabbing a half an hour here or a four-hour stint there, that means I spend 10 months from the start to the end of the first draft.
It didn't help that I tried a new genre with this story. Don't worry, it's still erotic romance with a BDSM twist. I have too much fun with those scenes to stop writing them!
No, what's different is that this erotic romance is couched inside a murder-mystery - and that's new for me. I loved reading Mary Stewart and Victoria Holt when I was a teenager and their mysteries always kept me enthralled. I tried before to write one and got halfway through before wrote myself into a corner I still haven't gotten out of. One of these days I'll get back to it and find the way out for the hero and heroine.
Now this manuscript is off for editing...and I'm coming up for air. The last of the trees are *just* starting to bud here and I'm thinking tomorrow will be a good day to get myself into the garden and plant a few things -- now that I've remembered the world has kept spinning while I was otherwise engaged.
Play safe,
Diana
PS. I'm playing around with covers. Once I get a few I like, I'll post them here and you-all can vote on your favorite. Yes, this one will be self-pubbed. :)
I started writing this story back in July, 2011. I had lots of time in the summer, so the first 40,000 words went down pretty fast. But then my day job kicked in and my writing time was relegated to the weekends. I've also found that I don't write well from Thanksgiving till about mid-January. I can write short, slice-of-life stories then, but I just can't stay focused on a large work with all the festivities. "Callie's story" (as it is named on my computer) got set aside and the most I did was pick at it now and again.
That's the problem when people ask me, "How long does it take for you to write a novel?" If I were to actually log my time in front of the keyboard over the past ten months, I'd have to say two to three weeks of 24/7 days. Break it out into 40-hr weeks and the time grows to 8-12 weeks. But because I write on the weekends or at night, or when I'm waiting in the doctor's office, only grabbing a half an hour here or a four-hour stint there, that means I spend 10 months from the start to the end of the first draft.
It didn't help that I tried a new genre with this story. Don't worry, it's still erotic romance with a BDSM twist. I have too much fun with those scenes to stop writing them!
No, what's different is that this erotic romance is couched inside a murder-mystery - and that's new for me. I loved reading Mary Stewart and Victoria Holt when I was a teenager and their mysteries always kept me enthralled. I tried before to write one and got halfway through before wrote myself into a corner I still haven't gotten out of. One of these days I'll get back to it and find the way out for the hero and heroine.
Now this manuscript is off for editing...and I'm coming up for air. The last of the trees are *just* starting to bud here and I'm thinking tomorrow will be a good day to get myself into the garden and plant a few things -- now that I've remembered the world has kept spinning while I was otherwise engaged.
Play safe,
Diana
PS. I'm playing around with covers. Once I get a few I like, I'll post them here and you-all can vote on your favorite. Yes, this one will be self-pubbed. :)
Tuesday, May 08, 2012
After the First Draft
I just finished writing my next novel.
Those are wonderful words. And true ones. Over the weekend I
finished the first draft of my next release.
The first draft.
Now begins the real work of being a writer.
Remember how I said I am a pantser? I write as the story
comes to me, as the characters reveal their peccadilloes and peculiarities, and
I like it like that. While I have a general outline in my head (I write
romances, so you know the hero and heroine will eventually see what we readers
have already figured out), I don’t know the details.
And because I don’t know the details, I often drop little
pieces of information that I later forget to pick up. Or I write in an action
later in the book that I never set up in earlier chapters.
And this is the hard part. Going back through the manuscript
and pulling together the details, tying together the threads that are broken,
picking up the ends of those that need to be rewoven into the fabric of the
story, and being ruthless in trimming away the extra pieces that don’t fit the
pattern.
At this stage, I wait between several days and two weeks
before I start again at the top of the story and read with a critical eye,
finding each of those details that need dealing with. The easy ones I take care
of on this pass through. The harder ones (like cutting entire scenes, which
happens!), I often make a comment in the margin to put off the pain and keep
going. I will cut what needs to be cut – but sometimes I need to get used to
the idea before I actually highlight and remove the offending passage to my
“extras” folder.
(Sidenote: I keep an extras folder for every single story
I’ve ever written. It contains sometimes only a phrase or sentence that I liked
but it didn’t fit [and I might use later in some other story], sometimes it
contains entire scenes that didn’t work. These scenes on occasion become short
stories of their own [Secret Signs in Timeless Love, for example]).
That’s draft two.
The next go is my eye on continuity. Does my hero keep the
same hair color throughout? If they were sitting at the start of the scene and
standing at the end of it, did I actually tell the reader that they stood? This
is the hardest pass for me since I can see the scenes in my head and I think
I’ve got everything covered. Then someone else will read it and invariably,
find something I missed.
And then, and only then, is it ready for an editor. Not for
readers, for general consumption, but for an editor (see above for one of
several reasons why I need one!).
You may notice I don’t do any passes for grammar, spelling
or punctuation. That’s because I’m really good at those. Really. Not tooting my
own horn here, but my teachers in school made sure I knew how to write good
sentences and where the punctuation marks go. Spelling was always easy for me
and the words I have trouble with? Well, that’s why we have spellcheckers.
So how is all this a workshop today? I’m leaving you an
activity below, but you have to have a first draft of a story (any length)
already finished to do it.
Activity:
Make sure some time has passed between the time you finished
writing the story and the time you start this activity. Two weeks is
reasonable. See why below.
1) Using a separate piece of paper, scroll through your
story and mark down the timeline. If it’s a longer story, go day-by-day and
chapter-by-chapter. Note what days take up how many chapters. Double check: do
you have any scenes that start at one time of day but end in an unrealistic
time for the action depicted? (example: I had a scene that started in
midafternoon, lasted about an hour and ended with the sun setting. Obvious
rewrite needed there!). NOTE: it is not necessary to read your manuscript
carefully at this time. You’re looking only at the timeline of events.
2) Start at the beginning of your story and read through
with a red pen in hand (if printed out) or the comment button readily available
(if using a wordprocessor). Mark it up. Be ruthless. Find the details that
don’t matter and cross them out (or delete them entirely). Put a star where you
need to add more detail to make the scene come alive. Use that fine-tooth-comb!
3) Set your manuscript away again for a few days. This
allows you to gain perspective and “forget” the story’s details. When you pick
it up, you’ll do so with fresh eyes.
4) Continuity check. You may have already noted some of
things that don’t add up when you went through it for step 2. That’s okay. Give
it another go-through and fix all those problems (if you didn’t already).
5) Check for spelling, punctuation and grammar. If you know
you have a problem area, this is the time to make sure you didn’t fall into the
trap. This is also the time, if you have a problem area, you hand the mss over
to someone else with the specific direction to check for spelling (or commas,
or split infinitives, etc.).
6) Think it’s ready? Find thyself an editor and release your
story to the world!
Wednesday, May 02, 2012
SWTWC releases!
That's the short title for Something Wicked This Way Comes, volume II. Inside you'll find my short story, Sahara Heat, a spicy tale of a blind date that goes very, very right.
An excerpt? You want an excerpt? Oh, okay. :)
An excerpt? You want an excerpt? Oh, okay. :)
From Sahara Heat
Diana Hunter
All Rights Reserved
Carla nodded and stepped back as he slid his keycard into
the lock. Briefly she had a very dirty thought about that action, but he
slipped inside the room and shut the door behind him before she could give it
voice. Which was probably a good thing. Her sense of humor had gotten her into
trouble with Doms in the past. Sometimes it was hard to remain submissive when
an opportunity arose for a particularly good zinger. And she was a sucker for a
good punch line.
The hallway remained empty, for which she was grateful. She needed
this. She wasn’t into one-night stands, and it had been a while since she’d
last played. Then she chuckled to herself. What was this, if not a one-night layover? He’d be on a plane for Egypt in
the morning and back to his sandy princess.
And herself? She’d be back at her computer, rejuvenated and
ready to write some very sexy stories, if all went well. Tonight was a win-win
if Dr. Josef Anderson could perform as well as she thought he could.
The door opened—and Carla stifled a gasp.
He’d taken off his shoes and stood barefoot on the hotel’s
plush carpet. His long blond hair hung loose, framing his Nordic face, a face
now filled with power and desire. Where before that power had expressed itself
in arrogance, it now took the form of authority and pure male sexuality.
His shirt hung open, revealing a smooth chest and tight
muscles, muscles that had turned her knees weak this morning when she first ran
into him and he’d caught her so easily. He’d set her on her feet as if she
weighed nothing. He could so easily crush her and yet he’d held her as
delicately as a rose.
Carla locked her knees lest she melt right there in the
hallway.
Behind him, the room glowed with the light of over a dozen
candles. Josef held out his hand in invitation. Without hesitation, she took it.
Play safe...and enjoy the new release!
Diana
Tuesday, May 01, 2012
Writing advice
So far, there are twenty-six workshops in this series. From writing prompts to playing around with genre and over to examining plot devices and character motivations, we've covered a lot of territory. Don't worry, there's more to come! Today, however, we're going to spend some time with the masters of the craft.
The quotes below all come from authors who have achieved a certain amount of fame or accolade from the world at large. Whether playwrights or screenwriters or novelists, we look to them for advice, to find the truth behind their creative processes because, in their words, we find our lessons.
So for today, I offer you advice from those who came before...
"Write freely and as rapidly as possible and throw the whole thing on paper. Never correct or rewrite until the whole thing is down. Rewrite in process is usually found to be an excuse for not going on. It also interferes with flow and rhythm which can only come from a kind of unconscious association with the material." - John Steinbeck
(more of his tips here)
"Don't tell me the moon is shining, show me the glint of light on broken glass." - Anton Checkov
"A story should have a beginning, a middle and and end...but not necessarily in that order." - Jean Luc Godard
"The good writers touch life often. The mediocre ones run a quick hand over her. The bad ones rape her and leave her for the flies." - Ray Bradbury
"Try to leave out the part that readers tend to skip. Think of what you skip when reading a novel: thick paragraphs of prose you can see have too many words in them. - Elmore Leonard
(his 10 rules are here and worth memorizing!)
"I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel." -Maya Angelou
"If there's a book that you want to read, but it hasn't been written yet, then you must write it." -Toni Morrison
And my favorite:
"You can approach the act of writing with nervousness, excitement, hopefulness or even despair; the sense that you can never completely put on the page what's in your mind and heart. You can come to the act with your fists clenched and your eyes narrowed, ready to kick ass and take down names. You can come to it because you want a girl to marry you or because you want to change the world. Come to it anyway but lightly. Let me say it again: you must not come lightly to the blank page." - Stephen King
The quotes below all come from authors who have achieved a certain amount of fame or accolade from the world at large. Whether playwrights or screenwriters or novelists, we look to them for advice, to find the truth behind their creative processes because, in their words, we find our lessons.
So for today, I offer you advice from those who came before...
"Write freely and as rapidly as possible and throw the whole thing on paper. Never correct or rewrite until the whole thing is down. Rewrite in process is usually found to be an excuse for not going on. It also interferes with flow and rhythm which can only come from a kind of unconscious association with the material." - John Steinbeck
(more of his tips here)
"Don't tell me the moon is shining, show me the glint of light on broken glass." - Anton Checkov
"A story should have a beginning, a middle and and end...but not necessarily in that order." - Jean Luc Godard
"The good writers touch life often. The mediocre ones run a quick hand over her. The bad ones rape her and leave her for the flies." - Ray Bradbury
"Try to leave out the part that readers tend to skip. Think of what you skip when reading a novel: thick paragraphs of prose you can see have too many words in them. - Elmore Leonard
(his 10 rules are here and worth memorizing!)
"I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel." -Maya Angelou
"If there's a book that you want to read, but it hasn't been written yet, then you must write it." -Toni Morrison
And my favorite:
"You can approach the act of writing with nervousness, excitement, hopefulness or even despair; the sense that you can never completely put on the page what's in your mind and heart. You can come to the act with your fists clenched and your eyes narrowed, ready to kick ass and take down names. You can come to it because you want a girl to marry you or because you want to change the world. Come to it anyway but lightly. Let me say it again: you must not come lightly to the blank page." - Stephen King
Now go write!
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